It's wonderful.
Simple but beautiful, with so much meaning and, as usual with your poems, a very strong ending.
The fact that I really love the ocean doesn't really make it worse...
I love it.

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It´s better to regret something you did than something you didn´t.

thanks so much for the encouragment!!!!! I'm glad you love it, I must admit I like this one too, which isn't very common for me! thanks for the fav!

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"I'm in the front row, the front row with popcorn, I get to see you, see you close up...one minute I want to banish you the next I want to be on a deserted island with you along with my three favorite cds.."

oh wow, i love this. it makes me want to cry. I can totally curl up with this poem and feel the emotion pouring out of it. god, you're amazing!!

wow! thank you so much... you always have the greatest things to say about my work, and I am so happy you like this piece. Thank you so much!

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"I'm in the front row, the front row with popcorn, I get to see you, see you close up...one minute I want to banish you the next I want to be on a deserted island with you along with my three favorite cds.."

Hey, I'd like to know if my interpretations of the metaphor here are correct, so, enlighten me:

the ocean: the speaker's relationship with a past lover.
darkness: negative feelings. loneliness.
indirect experience of the ocean (smelling, seeing): memories
whales: I have no idea what you mean by whales.
removal of clothing: sexual desire
swimming: return to past love
collecting shells: memory of innocence

Anyway, at first, I didn't see the connections, so I'm not sure if they're there. If they are, it's an excellent poem. If they're not, you faked me out with your single layer of meaning :-P

"wondered what it would be like if
you were there with me"

I think that the line would do better without these lines. The reader has figured out what's going on, and if you include these lines, it's like you're saying we're too dull to get it.

Good job!

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well actually I think for the most part I just faked you out, sorry that the poem is no longer excellent!

This really happened to me, and when I say i imagined I could see whales, it was because I really wanted to see whales.

The shell collecting was a longing to get back to innocence though, a time when everything didn't hurt so badly, and the darkness was definitely loneliness.
Sorry to disappoint you, thank you for the comments though,
but unfortunately the poem is exactly what it is.

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"I'm in the front row, the front row with popcorn, I get to see you, see you close up...one minute I want to banish you the next I want to be on a deserted island with you along with my three favorite cds.."

you're poems are so descriptive, I love them. I can place myself right there, doing what you're doing and I love it. I can experience the feeling and emotions for myself. Amazing.

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